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great captions
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Sun Sep 16, 2007 2:31 pmby Mr. X
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Sun Sep 16, 2007 2:35 pmby Haylie
Sweeeeet. I liked "arachnophobia". The angel one wasn't bad, either. Just check the grammar and spelling and you'll have it made. Good job.
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Sun Sep 16, 2007 6:12 pmby Katty
Hmmm. That spider one was kinda weird. Maybe if it said that he had a girly scream or something. I dunno. Good start none the less though. I'll keep reading. =^-^=
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Sun Sep 16, 2007 6:25 pmby Lucky
Try reading you captions out loud/in your head. The wording is kinda funny.
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Sun Sep 16, 2007 6:25 pmby Rowan
Hahaha, ok, I liked the Spider One. Reminds me of me, I *HATE* Spiders!
The angel one was awesome ^____^
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Sun Sep 16, 2007 11:08 pmby Ninian
Let your audience decide if they're good or bad. I know you didn't sign the criticism waiver, but this is an intervention.
The first one isn't bad, but is in dire need of editing. The grammar is off, the potentially emotional dialogue is wooden. It's definitely not a bad idea for a story -- in fact, if you had thought out the story a bit more (including an explanation for the sex change) it might have been great.
The second one however is what's making me bring down the hammer. It's beyond hope. It could have been funny or amusing, but instead it makes no sense, the grammar is a trainwreck, and it's blantantly sexist. It's not outright offensive (that would be misogynist or misandrist) but sexist nonetheless. Don't go there lightly, this is one of the few TG communities where a few of the "girls" are actually girls.
Also, edit your links if you want people to read this post comfortably, horizontal scrolling is fail.
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Sun Sep 16, 2007 11:42 pmby UDDCommander
Nina Anilina wrote:Let your audience decide if they're good or bad. I know you didn't sign the criticism waiver, but this is an intervention.
The first one isn't bad, but is in dire need of editing. The grammar is off, the potentially emotional dialogue is wooden. It's definitely not a bad idea for a story -- in fact, if you had thought out the story a bit more (including an explanation for the sex change) it might have been great.
The second one however is what's making me bring down the hammer. It's beyond hope. It could have been funny or amusing, but instead it makes no sense, the grammar is a trainwreck, and it's blantantly sexist. It's not outright offensive (that would be misogynist or misandrist) but sexist nonetheless. Don't go there lightly, this is one of the few TG communities where a few of the "girls" are actually girls.
Also, edit your links if you want people to read this post comfortably, horizontal scrolling is fail.
Agreed, completely and totally.
More great captions
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Tue Sep 18, 2007 9:59 pmby Mr. X
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Tue Sep 18, 2007 10:51 pmby UDDCommander
Your captions are just not well written, grammar errors and poorly done clichés matched with unrealistic character development and mismatched pronouns. Not to mention the first one was a broken link.
Re: More great captions
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Wed Sep 19, 2007 12:35 amby jimmyinwhite
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Wed Sep 19, 2007 1:31 amby Sasha
nice but #1 is broken
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Wed Sep 19, 2007 2:41 amby Kara-chan
Um, no offense, but your captions sorta...well, spelling and grammar are still taught in the public schools these days, right?
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Wed Sep 19, 2007 6:37 amby Katty
Sorry to be so mean, but it is not the best batch of captions I have read. You just need more practice. I suggest that you put your caption text into word or something to see if it has any mistakes it can pick up. That normally helps me with some of my mistakes.
=^-^=
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Wed Sep 19, 2007 5:52 pmby Haylie
Okay, even I have to admit this is getting a bit tedius, and I have low standards. The grammar is getting worse, I'm sorry, it just is. They're good concepts, just not good stories.
I'm not really one to talk, but still.
Good captions (please no bitching about spelling and grammar
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Thu Sep 20, 2007 7:58 pmby Mr. X
