WMGE Redux X

[Saya]

Greetings and salutations all. I'm not sure how many people read old, unupdated stories in the story section, but some of you may have recalled seeing a series called Worst Magical Girl Ever. It was the first story that I ever wrote. I always liked it, so a month or so ago I decided to start adding to it again. Reading over it again, however, I realized that I used to really suck. It been almost four years since I wrote the first chapter, and I write completely differently now. To do the project right, I decided I would have to rewrite it from the beginning. And since it's anime-based story, I figured it would be cool if its premise is that of an OAV to the old series. So it's kind of the same, but totally different. This is kind of a drafty version, but I kind of just want to put it out there now. So without further ado, here's the first chapter in a hopefully continuing saga.


What is the universe? It’s hard to say. Is it the summation of all that exists? Is it a finite space-time continuum in which all of reality is suspended? Or is it simply some giant alien’s fishbowl? Nobody knows the answer. The universe as it stands is both inscrutable and unknowable. Alternate universes, on the other hand, are much better understood, having been explored in such mediums as that one episode of Star Trek, every comic book ever, and even such philosophical luminaries as Darkwing Duck. Not only are these universes home to evil, bearded versions of all of us, but also worlds where familiar tales play out in unexpected ways. So relax, true believers, and prepare to be taken to one such familiar world.

Gil Kajime lived in paradise. It was a paradise that was only one-hundred square feet, but it was still a paradise. He had everything he could ever want from life. Magnificent posters lined his walls and ironic t-shirts filled his dresser. His bookshelf was stuffed with the graphic novels and rows upon rows of intricately detailed figurines stood ready to guard them. Yes friends, he had everything he could ever want from life in his room. It was truly God’s country. While there, he could know true happiness. But, unfortunately for Gil, he was not in his room.

“Crap! Crap! Crap! Crap! Crap!â€

[Sophia Anieri]

I don't usually comment on these, because I generally don't want to clutter the thread with commentary, or, if it's already cluttered with commentary, someone else has generally already said what I would have said better than I could say it. That said, there are three words I simply have to get out.

That.
Was.
Amazing.

You have spun together a story that is both hilarious and inspiring. You made me laugh most heartily. I strongly hope that this story is continued. If not, I strongly hope you continue to write. This is quality work.

(If you would rather the thread not be cluttered by comments, I will ask a mod to split off this post. Or you can do so. But I was wary of starting a new thread for commentary when I didn't know your preference.)

[Christina Anikari]

Yes this was a great thing to see. I did miss a continuation of the original story so it was great to see this even if it is a new story featuring some of the same characters and a story that is similar to the first one. Still a continuation of the first one would be great.

[Saya]

Thanks for the comments. I appreciate it.

Don't worry about posting here. Bring on the comments. The next chapter probably won't be out for at least a couple weeks, so it's no big deals if its cluttered. Que sera.

A continuation of the old one is probably never going to happen. It just doesn't mesh with me now. I've learned all kinds of things in the last few years. Plot. Characterization. Not writing myself into corners. On the positive side, every character (even the stupid ones with no point) will appear in some form or another in this.

Thanks again.

[Anamnesis]

Wow. it blends together well, and the references don't stop coming...
Funny.
Brilliant.
You dissed so many things, I think I loast my soul by laughing at them...
W00t! Bring on the next!

[Mitera Nikkou]

I really enjoyed this. It's been too long since I read the original parts of your story to be able to compare things technically, but I enjoyed this one just as much as I did before with the first version at the very least. And with that said, I demand more! More! >:O

Also, your spelling was impeccable. Don't know about grammar since I know nothing much about it, so there's nothing that I can say about that. Well, except that things seemed right. ;p The only thing that I noticed was that there were words missing in a few places.

About time I got to this... Now I have other stories to catch up with. XD;;