Taralynn's Desk

[Chibi MitchellTF]

Hey, there's a reason that good villains explain all their motives before killing the heroes, or worse. It helps keep the story working well.

[Taralynn]

Sorry for the delay but chapter 10 of Crew Shift is up!

I don't really have much time to comment on it here (got to get to school) but just read the commentary at the end of the chapter and please give your thoughts. I love your thoughts!

[Taralynn]

Well, Chapter 11 of Crew Shift is now up...

It took me a while to write this chapter. I couldn't quite figure out how I wanted to end it and then it hit me and did what I expected to be a very good ending. I think it sets up chapter 12 well. Hopefully I can deliver.

Please give your thoughts on the chapter- kind of like to hear what everyone else thinks.

[Taralynn]

Not that anyone cares but Chapter 12 of Crew Shift if finally up!

Took me long enough, huh?

Well, I think the chapter came out well. Hopefully I'll hear from some of you and get your thoughts. Writing chapters just isn't as fun without comments.

And by the way, when I update, it will now be on Thursdays. I think it will lend itself better to more frequent updates.

[Chibi MitchellTF]

Sorry for not commenting, I forgot to check the Stories section. I was looking forward to see how the Captain escaped, now to read it!


Good chapter, can't wait for the next...Especially since, besides wrap-up, there is just one detail that needs to be resolved.

[Taralynn]

Chapter 13 has now been posted! I was thinking some of you may not know my site address so here is the link to my site.

http://taralynn.sincomics.com

I'm hoping this chapter is to your likings. PLEASE let me hear your thoughts.

[Arkain]

One: The decompression would not be very fast. Movies ALWAYS exaggerate this.
Two: They should be able to easily plot the course the body would have taken. It's not so much finding a speck of sand in a 3 dimensional space, it's finding a body along a tight cone of probability.
Three: If there was one magical Yrch, there should be another magical somebody.

Xaen was a psychotic butcher. Let Karma sort her out, she was irredemiable in this life. Or whatever fate awaits the dead. ;D

[Gee-chan]

Good chapter....Xaen is kinda like my sis in a bad mood....ok maybe not....verry's worse.

Arkain I agree with all but your first point. Ever seen a balloon burst? It would decompress at something like that rate.

Cant wait to see what happens when they arrive at the base cuz everyone who wasnt on the ship will be like OMG!

[Chibi MitchellTF]

Okay...You need to deal with the possibility of whether or not there is ANOTHER magical Yrch, if recovering the body would really do anything, and confirming that Xaen=dead. Other than that, nice.

[Arkain]

Actually, Gitz, you're forgetting that a balloon is an elastic under intense pressure. The material is not very strong so it rips fast and makes a larger hole.

I can attest from NASA stuff that leaks in starships actually occur extremely slowly (at least the small kind.)

A hole wide enough for a person to go through would obviously suck air faster, but how fast I'm not sure.

[Gee-chan]

Good point and now that you mention it I agree but in this case it is a fairly small room which will have a hole in large enough for about 5 men to get through at the same time. in this case trhe decompression would be fast.
These small holes you normally get can only let through a bit of air at once and it is a large place, so proportionaly yes it would be slow, but in this case it would be fast.

on a different note. Taralynn, what are you thinking of writing next? that was a good story and I like your writing style. Cant wait to see what your next project will be.

[Arkain]

Was it a small room with a large hole?
I should reread, I thought it was a one-man hole in a very large corridor.

[Taralynn]

Sorry, I forgot to post. Ahem, the final chapter is up but because I didn't feel it was complete I'll be posting an Epilogue as well this week.

Okay, the way I imagined the corridor was a hallway about as wide as two cars- so fairly wide. The door (that hooked up to the airlock. I imagined as wide enough to walk three people side by side. So I wasn't thinking this was a small thing. What might have cause some confusion was the holes Irium's crew made cutting through the door with the plasma torch.
I imagined the door being round with locks going all around it... like a ton of deadbolts. So the torch cut through all of those and they simply just slid the door (it was a sliding door) into the slot it slides into so the airlock was completely exposed to space.

As for what I'm going to write next... I'm probably going to do another one-shot piece before picking up my next multi-chapter work. The one shot is going to be kind of an experimental piece. Because it's a one shot I don't want to give it all away so I'll be quiet on that one. As for the multi-chapter work, it's going to be more of a comedy. I figure since Mother Raven and Crew Shift were more serious I'd try my hand at something more amusing. Once again, I don't want to give up too much but the setting will be a more modern one dealing with a classic type of anime genre.

[Taralynn]

Okay, Epilogue of Crew SHift up on my site... to drained to say anything else other than I'd like your comments, observations, and questions

[Arkain]

I think their reactions to Mateo were rather disgusting. Sure, they feel cheated because they were going to be forced into sex slavery, but a person should have every right to do what he or she wants with his or her body.

Naturally, the military has some laws against this; discipline breakdown wouldn't be the half of it, some of her less restrained male comrades probably would have done something horrible to her.

From the sounds of it, she did it completely of her own free will and I can't see any issue with it. Now, if she was forced (financially or otherwise) and didn't WANT to...

Heee, Foxy and the XO look so cute there. ;D
I refuse to answer your questionnaire, I've already commented extensively ;D

Just remember my advice, and focus on realistically reacting events and characters. Internal consistency is the word.