James and Jayme

[Jayme]

Name: Takineth, James
Gender: Male
Title: Black Dragon, Mirror Master (Class Level E),
Species: Siderian Dragon
Age: Physically 21 years old, Spiritually 2 millenia's (2000 years old)
Height: 5'9" (6'2 in Dragon-Human Form)
Weight: 140 lbs (230 lbs in Dragon-Human Form)
Hair: Dark Red / Black
Eyes: Left: Blue with 25/20 vision, Right: Silver 20/20 vision (Both red in Dragon-Human Form)

Main Skill: Mirror Control
Immune to: Fire and Wind and Electricity
Weak against: Heavy Ice and Water attacks
Strong against: Darkness attacks
Normal Defense against: Light and Sound based attacks
Pros: Heavy Strength, Weapon Skill, and Creativity in battle
Cons: Mediocre Speed, and Relatively weak in magic use and easily angered!


Appearance: Crouched, Attack Look, Average Look, Pose.

-
-
-
Name: Oblivion, Jayme
Gender: Female
Title: Black Dragon, Mirror Mistress (Class Level E), Purple Nurse(Lady of Purple)
Species: Siderian Dragon
Age: Physically 17 years old, Spiritually 2 millenia's (2000 years old)
Height: 5'5" (5'11 in Dragon-Human Form)
Weight: 110 lbs (180 lbs in Dragon-Human Form)
Hair: Dark Red / Black
Eyes: Left: Blue with 25/20 vision, Right: Silver 20/20 vision (Both red in Dragon-Human Form)

Main Skill: Mirror Control
Immune to: Fire and Wind and Electricity
Weak against: Heavy Ice and Water attacks
Strong against: Darkness and Earth-based attacks
Normal Defense against: Light and Sound based attacks
Pros: Heavy Strength, Weapon Skill, and Creativity in battle
Cons: Mediocre Speed, and Relatively weak in magic use and easily angered!


Appearance: Fuku, Celestial, Beach, Average, Christmas-y, Dragon-Form.


-
-

Normally Happy, both TF and personality wise, easily set off though, and will quickly jump at a chance to fight. If friends or life is in danger, a fight will surely follow.

-
-

Weapons:

Taki and Raki> large twin broad swords, forged of a heavy nearly unbreakable draconic steel, no special powers really unless used by the right person, then there used to enhance the power of certain fire/wind attacks

Ratikin> Large sword formed when Taki and Raki become fused together in battle, no special powers again, then its used to enhance the power of fire/wind attacks to a great extent than there unfused forms.. it too is forged of the unbreakable draconic steel, but the defense is greater than normal..

Satiko> Large staff, with the same properties and strengths of Ratikin, but more flexiblity, forged of the same steel with the same defense

Attacks (Main):

Soul Fire> Small ball of fire formed with energy from the soul, 10 uses before power begins to totally dwindle down, 15 uses before you lose control of your legs, 20 uses before you lose control of most of your body, more than 20 = nearly certain death

Soul Flare> Large Ball of fire formed with energy from the soul, one Soul Flare attack = 5 soul fire's combined.. with the same effect on the body as 5 soul fire's

Levis.....Adustum.....Humo.....Glacialis......Ventosus.......Excessum......Candidus....Pullus> a chant that unleashes all of the power within a person into a multi-elemental attack, at least energy-based power: stands for Light, Fire, Earth, Ice, Wind, Death, White, and Black.. each color of dragons that one has to defeat to master said chant!

X-Slash> Press energy into your blades (must have at least 2) rush forward and slice diagonally in both ways, the end result should equal an energy based X in the air, at which point you press said energy forward at your opponent.



Ownership of:

dragonwood tree - the trunk of this massive 35 foot tall tree is supported by a brace of steel, the tree itself sprouts a rare fruit, which properties are currently unknown..

Lab-top - the laptop itself looks normal enough, the surface is made of a shiny purple substance, hard as steel. The keys are forged with crystal/mirror, and the monitor looks shiny itself. It has a small port in the back that looks like it can connect to something bigger. (Primary Use: Information storage , Secondary Use: TF Method)

Mystic Mirror - a 7 Foot Tall mirror, with a crystalic surface, the boundaries of it are forged of a burnt steel like substance, within the mirror is the realm of the Siderian Dragon, where none can pass without permission. (Primary Use: Gateway , Secondary Use: TF Method)

Mirror Shard - Fragments of the Mystic Mirror about 8 inches tall, 4 inches wide.. comes in assorted colors (Primary Use: TF Method , Secondary Use: other stuff)

Mirror Shard Pistol - a steel remodified purple ruger .45 that fires Mirror Shards from it instead of bullets at high speeds..


(TBC at a later time.)

[Jayme]

(Continued)

Mirror Shard Guns - Like the Mirror Shard Pistol except for in different types - Sniper Gun, Shotgun, Bazooka, Chain Gun.

Purple Nurse's bag - Normal Nurse's bag contains bandages, medicines, key's, and...

The Purple Syringe - large syringe full of glowing purple liquid

Bag o` Evil - Things that could be considered evil, not all are allowed due to boundaries, thus she uses them in private.

Bag o` Potions - Potions that do random things such as cure, or TF, or on the off-chance even kill.

Fuku Ray (Unoperational) - Ray with several cannons that fires and puts you in a different form at random.

Cook Book - Obtained from Akane Tendo(Which is a bad cook) whom she considers the best cook ever, and cooks just as 'good' as Akane would on a bad day.

Gifts:

One of Sakura's wands - recieved after joining forces with Ahiru to revive Sakura's body..

2 marble-sized pearls (1 red, 1 green) - 1 represents fire the other wind, they were given to James on his first quest. Legend says in the right hands, they give a person the ability to weild fire without worry, and to control wind with little effort.

Places

Lab - ??? Place no-one has yet to travel, no further information availible ???

Astrum Plane - Home of the Siderian Dragon, the realm through the Mystic Mirror.

Treasure Trove - Place where James has kept treasures of the past hidden for the last 2000 years, apparently the things within are worth millions, only 2 people know the exact location of the Trove, James is one, and the other is dead.

-----------------------

Bio/Background: Starting out as a normal human child, James was genuinely happy, he had a brother named Jace, and a sister named Janae, his mom's name was Naida, his dad's name was Cale. He lived in peace for the first 4 years of his life until his home was destroyed, a local war had broken out and before James or his family could hear the news, the opposing army of the land had found them. The parents took quick action, and hid their children, in seperate spots. James happened to see the murder of his parents, and lived with that image for years. Thinking that his sister and brother were dead, he set out alone to find someone to help him get revenge for his parents..

He eventually ran across a man who called himself Damien Gimth, this guy told James that he would help him, and thus James' training began, he was first trained in the art of the sword, then in the art of self-defense and hand to hand combat. After 2 years James was trained for almost anything, he owed Damien alot, then after a few more years, the day finally came when his 'teacher' gave him his final mission, according to Damien a local emperor was being unjust and James' duty was to kill the emperor, having no other choice at the time, he did so, killing the emperor within 24 hours, but that was only the beginning of his 'fun'...

After he murdered the emperor, he discovered the man he had grown to think of as a father was the one who had killed his parents, and his second hand man, whom kept himself shrouded in black was his brother, whom he had long since thought dead. James knew what he had to do, and that night he slaughtered Damien in his sleep and sought out to start a new life, but fights constantly followed the young 9 year old boy, within 5 years he had already been through so much... he had no idea how Jace survived, and he didn't really care anymore, had his brother truly cared for him, he wouldn't have hid his identity....

James set out, but trouble always seemed to follow him, having taken part in 5 wars before he was 14, he had seen his fair share of blood and death. He had honed his skills, and developed a bit of an ego, going around picking fights with anyone weaker than him, he killed for fun, and stole for the pure pleasure of it. He made lots of enemies, and no allies, at least no allies that could be considered good. He sided with anyone who could help him get ahead, and somehow always managed to stay alive, only receiving minor wounds from time to time. He began to take part in larger battles each day, just for the fun of it, never thinking he could be beat, he was soon proven wrong...

He soon re-encountered his brother, who had also been training, James' ego got the best of him and he attacked head on, only to find that his brother had the aid of an even more powerful being, a silver dragon, his brother took him down with ease, leaving James to die in the middle of a mountain range. Beaten, Bloody, and unable to move James lay there staring at the sky, where he saw her, a beautiful black dragon, the dragon landed beside James and after a moment of consideration, fused their souls into one granting James the same power that Jace had used against him. The power still erratic, he had to find a way to control it.....

He traveled, and trained, leading a new life, he began to save people, and only fought when he had to. 5 years had passed, fighting and training. One day upon his travels he happened upon a young girl who was being attacked by a horde of demons, the demons had finally broken through the gate from Makai to this world, he didn't have time to think about this, the girl needed his help, he rushed forward and dealt with the demons, luckily for him, they were low class and he defeated them easy, before he could check on the girl she was gone, he didn't think much of it and continued on his way, where a light hit him, and he blacked out only to awaken in a room, a dark room with a single light upon him...

Beings higher than himself had gathered upon him.. 3 archangels of the highest calibur (Michael, Raphael, and Gabriel). Death, an elderly man dressed in black, who carried a staff with a skull fused to the top. 3 archdemons of the same calibur as the angels (Zarich, Drug, Indre). All Gathered with nameless angels, demons, and entities. James stood trembling in fear, all his past mistakes had finally come back to haunt him, he was ready to fight, even though he knew would lose, he couldn't let his life end here, not now, he had too much to do, like getting revenge upon his brother, thats when the beings began to speak to him...

Apparently the girl that he saved was of great importance to history, saving her had ensured the balance between the realms, the realms didn't see eye to eye but both sides wished to avoid a war. James stood confused, if he had done such a great thing, why was he here. They continued saying that instead of being admitted to heaven for his good deeds, he should first repent for his bad, thus they were to give him the 'Curse of Life' which granted something beyond even that of immortality, whilst he could be struck down, he would always revive and walk the land of the living for 3 millenia (3000 years). James once again faded to blackness, and awoke in the middle of the field, in his dragon form...

He worked for a good while, never aging once he physically looked 21 years of age, he trained, and protected, and fought, and learned many arts, having slowly but surely mastered the dragon within him. He found that the 'dream' he had was no dream, as he had been slain several times by beings of incredible strength, he didn't see his brother again, but little did he know that Jace and Janae, had both recieved the 'Curse of Life' although for seperate reasons. Making friends, losing them, Making lovers, but losing them as well, James had accept this life of loneliness and eventually recluded from the world of friendship and togetherness...

Then he happened upon Emesseff (MSF) where he met people who had similiar stories as him, he felt a part of a whole there... he would eventually become a master of mirrors, and discover more about himself than he could ever have comprehended before....


(TBC)

[Jayme]

Right! I, Fry, who drank Bont the Viscous, who drank Ungo the Moist, who guzzled Zorn the Stagnant...

[Time Lapse. The suns are nearly set. Fry is still reciting the oath by reading it from his arm.]

...who slurped Hudge the Dewy, who enjoyed a soup composed principally of Throm the Chunky, do solemnly swear to rule with honour and insanity - uh, integrity!

------

Right! Anyways, wasn't sure where to put this in my character post, and since I didn't want to edit one of the top two and I also wanted it to be seen im giving it its own post in this thread!

------


I am aware that the presence of this seal grants Joseph Fanning ("Wraith-kun") the right to use my character and/or all original works for all current "MSF High" related projects current or future. In the event I am dissatisfied with the portrayal of my original character, I waive my right to pursue legal action or demand reparation.

------

and there we go!

[Mr. Critick]

hmmm. two dragons today and they say dragon blood is good for the digestion... I mean Lets get on with the review.


25/20 in one eye that could cause some problems if no corrective means is used. Another area I wonder about are the immunity I can see Fire, and maybe energy by why wind? Also is it your dragon nature that giving these weakness and strength or something else.

I am guessing that James and Jayme are the same character but why two different postings if that is the case and the difference in last name? The backstory looks interesting but there are a bunch of red flags. Like I told enough person you cna be the hero all you want in your own little world but when you start interacting with other people that where you need to know all that is buttisk. This isn't a video game the higher beings have better things to do than go "hail our hero , thans for doing a job we can not do ourself because we are to weak and afraid."

He traveled, and trained, leading a new life, he began to save people, and only fought when he had to. 5 years had passed, fighting and training. One day upon his travels he happened upon a young girl who was being attacked by a horde of demons, the demons had finally broken through the gate from Makai to this world, he didn't have time to think about this, the girl needed his help, he rushed forward and dealt with the demons, luckily for him, they were low class and he defeated them easy, before he could check on the girl she was gone, he didn't think much of it and continued on his way, where a light hit him, and he blacked out only to awaken in a room, a dark room with a single light upon him...

Beings higher than himself had gathered upon him.. 3 archangels of the highest calibur (Michael, Raphael, and Gabriel). Death, an elderly man dressed in black, who carried a staff with a skull fused to the top. 3 archdemons of the same calibur as the angels (Zarich, Drug, Indre). All Gathered with nameless angels, demons, and entities. James stood trembling in fear, all his past mistakes had finally come back to haunt him, he was ready to fight, even though he knew would lose, he couldn't let his life end here, not now, he had too much to do, like getting revenge upon his brother, thats when the beings began to speak to him...

Apparently the girl that he saved was of great importance to history, saving her had ensured the balance between the realms, the realms didn't see eye to eye but both sides wished to avoid a war. James stood confused, if he had done such a great thing, why was he here. They continued saying that instead of being admitted to heaven for his good deeds, he should first repent for his bad, thus they were to give him the 'Curse of Life' which granted something beyond even that of immortality, whilst he could be struck down, he would always revive and walk the land of the living for 3 millenia (3000 years). James once again faded to blackness, and awoke in the middle of the field, in his dragon form...

I hate to say it but this sounds like it came from a really bad anime or video game plot. While could be interesting of done right, It comes off that you consider yourself the only being worthy of doing anything of greatness. From the way it sounds as soon as he repents for his bad, which is by doing what? His Curse is finally broken and can die like any mortal.

With some work your character could be a decent balance character for a dragon but you need to eat a bit of humble pie and figure out, how your past and present effects your future and get rid of some of the excess baggage. Maybe work up an RP where you lose your "immortality" for doing a good deed or something.

If your character started off as a Fighter type character what is he now doing with a lab and as a nurse? SInce you are not quite done yet about the Siderian dragon and how it relates to the black dragon.

[Jayme]

Look characters change ok? When James became Jayme certain aspects of her changed, James became the fighter, Jayme became the super genius, she got herself a lab, and adopted the abilities of her fallen friend Kaede the Purple Nurse. Due to her love of the color purple, she adopted the title Lady of Purple.

The siderian Dragon is a race in the works, just because its not finished doesn't mean I shouldn't use the name, its MY character species I didn't take it from a book, so it shouldn't matter to you or anybody else, I dont use the abilities of this race for evil or to make myself uber..

A little while before Jayme came into existence, there was a mirror mistress named Sara, when she died, Jayme gained her abilities, she's currently a Class Level E Mirror Mistress, not very strong at all compared to Sara who was a Class Level S Mirror Mistress. Sure you didn't comment on this but im stopping you before you do..

Jayme/James has weaknesses, and she has strengths, however before entering the realm of emesseff (which that backstory was..) he was just a warrior, that fought to fight, when he entered emesseff he found love, and friends, and a place to call 'home' sounds sappy and cliche, but after a while this place of happiness eventually prompted the birth of Sari, who eventually split off to do her own thing. After putting himself out for more TG's eventually Jayme was born. I gave the two characters differences instead of becoming a full-time tomboy or a full-time girly boy.

As for the 'curse of life' its NOT immortality its a CURSE, he's doomed to wander the lands for 3000 years, 2000 of which have passed, when the last 1000 years pass, his curse is broken, and he dies.. His draconic soul contributes to this as Dragon's are known to live longer than most humans at least in some books (PLEASE dont go looking for a book to say this happened there, this ISN'T a book, its my character, so the rules of books and fairy tales dont apply).. he's doomed to watch his friends, family, and other loved ones die because of his past crimes against humanity for that time period however.. and im not gonna do an RP to make James lose this curse, so DONT push the subject..

As for your thinking it sounds like a bad anime/video game plot, maybe so but whats your point? You dont like it, well tough its not your story, its mine, which is still being worked out, criticism is nice but only if im overpowered or not balanced enough, I gave myself plenty of weaknesses, and balanced them out enough with my strengths. Please DONT comment on my backstory, and what my characters are because YOU think its cliche or bad.

This is a realm of fantasy if I want my character to play a hero, then he will, just because im interacting with others doesn't mean I should go "WHOOP, well you may have been a warrior here, but people dont think Warriors and Heroes beloing here.. so POOF peasantry!!"

as for the vision, its called being above average, its part of her 'draconic' senses, he sees better than normal. The immunity to fire was from a year or so of training in the deepest pits of Makai after a while, his body developed a strong immunity to heat, the electricity immunity and wind immunity comes from stones encrusted to his swords. As long as he is considered OWNER of the swords, his body recieves and equal immunity.