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Birth of An Ovalisk

Postby Cutey Kerina » Mon Nov 06, 2006 11:39 pm

This is sorta inspired by William Faulker's steam-of-consciousness work. Enjoy

The Birth of an Ovalisk

By Kerina

A soft touch on a shoulder.

“Soft yellow light oh so bright. Hold me warm and safe tonight.â€
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Postby Kara-chan » Mon Nov 06, 2006 11:47 pm

Just a wee bit creepy @_@

Then again, that probably means you were doing your job with that ^^
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Postby Cutey Kerina » Tue Nov 07, 2006 12:07 am

Thank you ^_^ Creepy was my intent. And confusing like a mind all scrambled.
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Postby Mistress Guendolen » Tue Nov 07, 2006 12:09 am

That is indeed very creepy. It actually reminded me a lot of James Joyce's stream-of-consciousness work. You did quite well with this. That's a hard style to work in.
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Postby Beyond » Tue Nov 07, 2006 12:23 am

creepy? I love it!
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Postby Cutey Kerina » Tue Nov 07, 2006 2:02 am

I was gonna overdo it with mispellings but I just kept the one.

Basically read this as though the character has been touched by an Ovalisk before the opening line. The first line is a memory. Italics are memories of actions and things said that act as a trigger for further memories. The story takes place in an immeasurable moment when Aiden's humanity is erased and rewritten by an Ovalisk.
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Postby Mitera Nikkou » Tue Nov 07, 2006 8:59 am

This is a good way to rate my IQ, and it must be below ten. I read it four times, but neither time was my brain able to grasp it. How pathetic. ~_~ *Goes back to learning the alphabet*
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Postby P-tan » Tue Nov 07, 2006 6:30 pm

I like it..(stupid unemotional mood)

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Postby Mistress Guendolen » Wed Nov 08, 2006 12:05 am

You're not pathetic. I didn't grasp that intent either, and I not only count myself an intelligent person, but heck, I majored in English! The major of reading things and analyzing them to find their intent and deeper meaning! Though in my case, it's probably because I still don't know too much about this breed, despite hanging out on this forum for a year and a half.

Nekkid1 wrote:This is a good way to rate my IQ, and it must be below ten. I read it four times, but neither time was my brain able to grasp it. How pathetic. ~_~ *Goes back to learning the alphabet*
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Postby Cutey Kerina » Wed Nov 08, 2006 12:50 am

When I get done with homework I promise to put up an annotated version.
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Postby Mistress Guendolen » Wed Nov 08, 2006 12:51 am

Annotations? Ooo, I haven't done those since college! It'll be a bit of a nostalgia trip, there. And helpful, too, of course.
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Postby Chibi MitchellTF » Wed Nov 08, 2006 1:04 am

Must...see...annotated version. And now I'm tempted to either post my Aeteranale Portion of my fanfic early, or write it early...or have a cliff notes/special scenes version.

Ovalisks are interesting. For information, there is this site: http://www.aeternalae.com/wiki/Ovalisk

I'm gonna take a sorta positive thing on them on my site...they're treated as 'rebirth' mainly. I need to point out immediate fear, but I think I do that by having everybody scared out of their ever-loving minds of using them, and that they are mainly kept as a last resort, like walking nukes...
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Postby Cutey Kerina » Wed Nov 08, 2006 4:19 am

I'm gonna use numbers so it doesn't break up the flow too much

The Birth of an Ovalisk

By Kerina

A soft touch on a shoulder.
(1)
“Soft yellow light oh so bright. Hold me warm and safe tonight.â€
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Postby Chibi MitchellTF » Wed Nov 08, 2006 2:23 pm

Interesting...I wonder if the being that is him will return, since Ovalisks, according to the encyclopedia, do in fact mature into Aeternalae, and regain memories...
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