One small blarg for man, One Gient Blarg for Man kind.

[Lucky]

Befor you turn away, I spell checked all my captions in MS Word befor makeing them.
>.>

I wanted to try it out, they kinda suck compared to your guys.... BUT AT LEST I GET A E FOR EFFORED!


http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/Grand_General.jpg
The Grand General isn't amused. But he does look adorable now!

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/Maided.jpg
Counter Strike so needs a TF gun! =O

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/rakugaki-kora.jpg
1st Caption I ever did. Please don't hurt me. T___T

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/Strange_Gass.jpg
In Space, No one and hear the TF!

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/Maiden_Tree.jpg
Just sitting under the Madien tree.

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/caption.jpg
Why don't more video games have TecnoMancers anyway?

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/War-Hammmer.jpg
THE WAR HAMMER OF PINK!

http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Damn_Lucky/Captions/Kasumi.jpg
Why yes, I have tried the "99 years old cheat" in DOA... c.c











Now, please forgive me for wasteing your time.
D=

[Mistress Guendolen]

Pretty good for your first effort, actually. I did notice a few small editorial mistakes, though. Yes, everything was spelled right... technically. But there were several instances of homonyms, and a couple times when you used a comma where there should have been a period or whatever. I can provide specific locations, if you wish. The storytelling part is good, however.

[Mitera Nikkou]

Like Gwen said. Overall, they're not bad. Although I can't say I understand the first one.

[Mistress Guendolen]

The jist I got is that one of the general's subordinates played a trick on him that caused him to be turned into a cute girl. This subordinate was apparently a trickster who had to be repeatedly bailed out of trouble. Perhaps a little more fleshing of the story could be in order?... I mean, why would the general bail out someone who got him into that fix? I must admit that that bit, at least, seems a trifle awkward.

[Mitera Nikkou]

Ah, I think I understand it now... I guess I didn't catch the viewpoint from which it takes place when I first read it.

[Katty]

Not bad, not bad. I do agree with Nikkou and Guendolen about the first one. It was kinda hard to understand / read the first time. Re-reading helped. In the maiden tree cap, lots of wrong word use. Witch should be which for one thing.

I thought it was a good first batch. I hope to see more in the future. =^-^=

[Lucky]

The jist I got is that one of the general's subordinates played a trick on him that caused him to be turned into a cute girl. This subordinate was apparently a trickster who had to be repeatedly bailed out of trouble. Perhaps a little more fleshing of the story could be in order?... I mean, why would the general bail out someone who got him into that fix? I must admit that that bit, at least, seems a trifle awkward.

Ya, I did screw that one up bad. ^^;; After I first re-read it I was like "that didn't come out the way I hoped..." I was thinking of not posting it, but I thought what the heck might as well. I might revist it, to make it more clear.

Not bad, not bad. I do agree with Nikkou and Guendolen about the first one. It was kinda hard to understand / read the first time. Re-reading helped. In the maiden tree cap, lots of wrong word use. Witch should be which for one thing.

I thought it was a good first batch. I hope to see more in the future. =^-^=

I'm horrid at mixing up witch and Which, sorry about that.
._.

[Katty]

Like I said, it is no big deal. I just want to help as much as I can. =^-^=

[Chibi MitchellTF]

The 99 years old cheat is a myth!

[Lucky]

The 99 years old cheat is a myth!

That's what they want you to think!

[Katty]

Or maybe they know that you will know that they want you to think that, so they don't want us to think it, only we do.

Ya think? =^-^=

[muffinstud]

Hey, cheat codes or not, they're still very decent captions, I must say. Especially liked the pink hammer and the space one.

[Meru]

I like them.

[Lucky]

DANGER WILL ROBIN SON! DANGER!
DANGER WILL ROBIN SON! DANGER!
LUCKY HAS MADE MORE CAPTIONS!


1st up, I the next three I made are my 1st adtempt at makeing a universe.

The Magical Pool table's 1st victem.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... Pool01.jpg

The best can't always stay on top.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... Pool02.jpg

This caption I tried to explain more about the world. I don't think it came out too well, but here it is any way.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... Pool03.jpg




As for the rest, I've tried keeping them as short and sweat as possible. As a way for makeing them more enjoyable. I think I was more sussesfull with these ones.

=D


Never trust a evil sister.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... o_cake.jpg

Reality Virus.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... Screen.jpg

Why does it seem there are more girls here every day?
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... m_girl.jpg

A new restuant chain, that's sweeping the nation.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... burger.jpg

This was a stupid looking picher, so I decided it needed a silly caption.
Warning: Graby-ness, nothing explicite.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... o_noez.jpg

I know nothing about the eternals, apart from what I've read in captions. But It's ment to be funny, so there.
http://i9.photobucket.com/albums/a86/Da ... zed_on.jpg


Also thank you for all the nice comments.
=3

[Mistress Guendolen]

Um, I'm afraid I still saw typos.... **sweatdrop** But the ideas are sound. The transforming pool table is an interesting notion. What about variations that do other sorts of changes? You know, animorphs and fantasy races and so forth. With out without gender-switch option. There could be variations for both. And the bimbo cake one was amusing. You got the stereotypical bimbo language down, there.