by Ninian » Mon Sep 03, 2007 8:57 pm
I noticed a number of your captions are self-inserts. While this isn't exactly a problem by itself, there is the problem that few people know who or what "Impy" is as a fictional character. This detracts a bit from the experience, though as someone who's done self-insert captions myself at least once, I know the empowering feeling they can have. Just keep it in mind.
Also, I have a hard time sometimes envisioning what's going on due to the chaotic and sudden nature of the events in what you're writing. The School Samurai bit is a good example of that. It comes off as a bit sloppy or rushed. Consider proofreading before finishing, or even ideally writing the caption in a word processing program before editting the image itself.