Whatevr's Captions--criticism encouraged

[Dark Scout Cyclondia]

Your latest captions are completely awesome! Keep up the great work!

[Lucky]

Uhh...trying to look into that, but I'm not sure exactly which ones you mean because I can't really remember which ones were made when--my brain is consistently frazzled. Erm, could I maybe have the titles of a few?
It may just be because I made them in mostly the same day...

Well. There still great captions all the same. I just meant as a way to try to push your self foreword. They can still have the same theams. Just think of new ways to do them.

[Whatevr89532]

Hn.. Just thought I should let people know there's a few new ones...

Also, I know the picture for one of them has been used before (by someone else), but I had a good idea for it and wanted to try anyway...

[muffinstud]

Well, since I haven't posted on any of your stuff yet, this will apply to all of your captions, not just the ones you just put up.

GOOD JOB!

I heartily enjoy your enthusiasm for captions, and you have a nice variety of characters as well. I too am not a fan of the mental changes. All in all, you remind me of me when I was me when I was starting out as myself. Me.
If you're wanting some criticism, I have some suggestions. First, try a new perspective or type of environment. So far, most of your captions are from a transformee's point of view (or a 3rd person that is quite close to it). Try the same kind of transformation, but with some spectators. Or try the private transformation, but from a "fly on the wall's" point of view. Who knows? Maybe some new and interesting sources of transformations will come of it. I personally do it to keep myself from getting into ruts. Most of all, just do what feels natural and have fun. If you don't have fun with a caption, what are the chances that your audience will? Second, it would be nice if you would mention the title of the new captions in your posts, so as to make finding them a little easier. You're starting to get a decent collection to sift through, and you don't want people getting lost in there. Or do you? (rubs hands together and starts plotting menacingly) Yes... I see it now. Caption traps...

Keep up the good work. You have great potential and I thoroughly enjoy your work. I hope to see more.

[Whatevr89532]

Thank you very much, muffinstud...I think I've read your stories, or at least some of 'em. I'd give you a cookie, but you'd probably suspect it was laced with something.










It totally would be

[Whatevr89532]

Okay, three new ones up now. "Crime" and "Punishment" are not intended to be read independently, as the first is dissatisfying without the second and the second doesn't make much sense without the first. Also, I know they're really short--guess I felt like doing short and sweet. "BFFs" was an attempt to use a different point of view...and is a lot longer apparently as a result. Also, as it says on the image, the picture was from Firingwall...

[muffinstud]

:)
Thank you very much, muffinstud...I think I've read your stories, or at least some of 'em. I'd give you a cookie, but you'd probably suspect it was laced with something.

You're very welcome, but it seems now I have to thank you. I have to admit that I really liked "BFF's". It just seemed so casual, and that's something unusual (and good) in a caption. Also liked the storytelling between "Crime" and "Punishment".

Oh, and the cookies? Despite implications of cannibalism, I'd still eat it, but only after force feeding a bit to Rowan.

[Whatevr89532]

There are four new ones, I can't recall the exact names at the moment but might re-post or edit this one with their titles later...

[Lucky]

I think these are some of your best captions yet! very well written.

[Whatevr89532]

I've had a bunch of time and/or inspiration issues (one seems to be missing whenever the other isn't), so I may be restricting myself to captions for awhile longer. However, there are new ones in the works and at least one posted since the last post in this thread. 'Fortune' is the most recent, I think, and the serieses now have their own area within the album, with numberings and everything .

[Sailor Ganymede]

Fortune was an excellent caption!

[Whatevr89532]

Thanks.
There were a couple more posted last night, far later than I ought've been up....

[Sailor Ganymede]

Femme Fatale and Wonderful were also really awesome captions! Keep up the great work! Good going!

[Whatevr89532]

A few new ones...
Graffiti, Uncommon Cold, Black Butterfly (I must apologize profusely for the way that photobucket cut off the title of this one while looking through the album...).

[muffinstud]

Just consider what problems there would be if you switched the titles and had one called "Uncommon Butterfly", or "What an Assisstant!"

Of the three new ones, Uncommon Cold is my personal favorite because of the nice description, choice of words, and how the ending almost feels like a punch line. You've progressed quite well. As Strong Bad would say, you have "The Skills of an Artist."

Now, I have a challenge for you. You do well with creating characters during transformations. What say find a couple of images with the same character in it (game cg's accomplish this easily) and have one pic be the transformation, the other be some hairy situation your recent transformee has gotten into. Essentially, what I'd like to see is not just how the character becomes her new self, but how she handles a situation.

If you have any questions, The Oh So Nekkid One has tips, pics, and jarred farts for sale. I'd stay away from the fart jars though. I opened one a couple months ago and the paint is still peeling off the walls.