Hikari's captioning attempt

[HikariOblivion]

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yes, it's a single story, and yes, i kinda ran out of ideas near the end ^^;;

the idea was that the whole planet would be affected eventually, but i ran out of ideas and pictures waaay before that...

so.. uh... yeah ^^;;;

[Sierra_Rune]

I like! I don't see any sign of loss of ideas at the end, either...It's good!

[opus`]

I like it too, Hikari. Though, (and this is nit-picky) it would be cool if you could remove the "Minerva" from the top of Aurora's picture.

[HikariOblivion]

I like it too, Hikari. Though, (and this is nit-picky) it would be cool if you could remove the "Minerva" from the top of Aurora's picture.

good idea ^^;; working on that now (EDIT: now done)

and thanks for the positive comments, both of you ^^

[Cutey Kerina]

Hmmm...I like the set-up. The lead-up is nice too...but who is "Shaun" supposed to be and why did it alarm Bob? I didn't get that. The usage of images is nice. I would have liked the tf more involved for both and intriguing but the whole story works pretty good. The ending is kinda hard to follow though...what happened?

Still an awesome effort. Thank you so much Hikari for sharing it ^^ *bows*

[Ninian]

Oh my goodness ^^;;

Umm... Ghosty?

I'm all tingly and giddy now, so I'm going to do what I normally don't like random strangers doing... but... that @.@ gets a glomp! *glomp*

[HikariOblivion]

Hmmm...I like the set-up. The lead-up is nice too...but who is "Shaun" supposed to be and why did it alarm Bob? I didn't get that. The usage of images is nice. I would have liked the tf more involved for both and intriguing but the whole story works pretty good. The ending is kinda hard to follow though...what happened?

Shaun is a male name... it's the usual "OMG TG!?!" response for victims that, while it is a BIG cliche, works

as for the ending, essentially, by escaping, they released the cat goddess that had transformed them, into the outer world, and she would, as the generous goddess she is, bestow her gift unto other mortals just as she did them

thanks Akemi ^^ i'm glad you liked it

[Ninian]

Any story with a slight evil (but cute) streak to it with implications the "reader" is a potential victim (or even outright so through second person perspective) is pretty much my sweet spot. Such a caption from MSF.com was probably my first inspiration for Eternals.

I just got my manna for the day.

[Cutey Kerina]

Shaun is a male name... it's the usual "OMG TG!?!" response for victims that, while it is a BIG cliche, works

I understand the rest....buuuut..."Shaun" when spoken can also be a woman's name...as in Sean Young.

[HikariOblivion]

Shaun is a male name... it's the usual "OMG TG!?!" response for victims that, while it is a BIG cliche, works

I understand the rest....buuuut..."Shaun" when spoken can also be a woman's name...as in Sean Young.

i counter this with an "i pulled a bunch of male names out of thin air"

seriously, though, i'll definitely consider that in a revision

[Cutey Kerina]

*giggles* Sorry Hikari, I don't mean to nitpick but I just want to help you make it the best possible. Hope you don't mind. ^^;;

[jimmyinwhite]

I hope that I get to read more in this story.
maybe have them meet an old man that looks like an older harry potter named jim.

[Ninian]

I hope that I get to read more in this story.
maybe have them meet an old man that looks like an older <a href="http://www.serverlogic3.com/lm/rtl3.asp?si=11&k=harry%20potter" onmouseover="window.status='harry potter'; return true;" onmouseout="window.status=''; return true;">harry potter</a> named jim.

Congrats. That was probably the most random thing anyone's ever said on this board.

[HikariOblivion]

to tell the truth, as far as i feel now, this is it. done, finito, and other variations i can't think about... if i do go back to this, which i may, i will not be taking character requests, as the 'before' are almost all stereotypes, and the after are... i wouldn't say 'borg'-esque, but are mutual friends and allies, and all want to help their goddess spread her gift, and the story is less about a protagonist, or a struggle, but more about the spread of the goddess's gift and how it affects the planet as it becomes deeper and more common...

if i feel like it, i may have a sort of 'runner' aspect with the last few remaining humans, though i can't promise anything, as my effort for story ideas and things varies randomly, and like i said, currently i don't have it

[Ninian]

It's flattering to know I'm a trend setter.